iDUENDE-11 (August,2012) POETRY YEAR-1

8/16/2012

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পরীক্ষামূলকভাবে এই খানে প্রতিটি কবিতায় নতুন কমেন্ট পদ্ধতি চালু করা হয়েছিলো(এটাকে ভোট বা প্রতিযোগিতা ভেবে ভুল করবেন না), আপনারা সহমত না হলে এটি তুলে দেওয়া হবে পরের সংখ্যা থেকে, সহমত হলে চলবে, এই নিয়ে ফেসবুকেও প্রচুর আলোচনা চলছে... আপনা চাইলে এই লিঙ্কটি ক্লিক করলেই সেটা দেখতে বা তাতে যোগদান করে মতামত দিতে পারেন -- এইরকম লেখা ছিলো, মতামত আমরা পেয়েছিলাম, 78.57% এর মতামত ছিলো চলার পক্ষে, কিন্তু আমরা সংখ্যাধিক্যকেই উৎকর্ষতা মনে করি না, তাই যারা আপত্তি করেছিলেন তাদের গুরুত্ব দিয়ে এখানে একটু বদলে নেওয়া হ'ল , এবিষয়ে আপনাদের মতামত চাই ... আপনাদের মতামত একান্ত কাম্য...iদুয়েন্দে

21 Comments

Swarnadeep Banik

8/16/2012 01:05:28 am

Amar kobita chapanor jonno dhonnobaad,i'm glad je amar kobita atojoner songe chepechen apni. Sanjaybabu-r kobita besh bhalo.tobe kobitar sonkhya khub kom bole kharap laglo,duende-er ager sonkhya prochondo bhalo chilo,i must say.

Swarnadeep Banik

8/16/2012 01:13:56 am

Akta bhul- amar kobitar moddhe 'bisshoy' banan bhul likhechen. That's unfair.

Bhaskarjyoti Das

8/16/2012 04:46:10 am

@SWARNADEEP

1.kobita alochona korei rakha hoyechhe sokoler songe.. age 15ta kore thakto ekhon 10ta kore... jate details alochona cholte pare

2. 'UNFAIR' shobdota ki thik holo vai? emonta noy j ami bismoy bananta janina... othoba ichchhakrito vabe uddesso nie tomar kobitay banan ta vul likhechhi... tai ki? ek hate sobta korte giye banan kichhu vul hoye jay.. er jonya kono excuse dichchhi na borong kkhomai chaichhi... kintu eta thik kono UNFAIR kichhu korar jonya korini.. jara sompadonar kajer songe jukto asa kori bujhben...

3. ei dekho thik kore dilam... eta web-mag er ekta darun subidha... jokhon khushi correction kora jay!

Swarnadeep Banik

8/17/2012 02:47:48 pm

Asol-e kobitalekhok hisebe nijer sontander proti akta soft corner theke thake, to tai ami likhechilam. Ebar thik korar jonno dhonnobaad. asol-e tomar osubhidha-r kothata jantam na bole ..... bhul bujho na. Astonirjon babu-r kobita-ta bhalo na lagleo,tar comment bhishon akopot. Thank you.

Bhaskarjyoti Das

8/18/2012 08:03:39 pm

sontan hok kintu pokkhopatdusto pita hoa thik thak habbit noy.. mul kotha unfair shobdota nie.. ami ekjon sompadok.. ekta kaj sompadona kori.. ami kono nirrbachok ba bicharok noy j tumi bolbe tomar monoj tiwari ba sourov gangullyir moto protivadhor kobitatir banan ichchhakrito vabe vul kore ami tar proti unfair byabohar korlam.. tai ki?

banan vul thakle 5000 bar bolbe.. er age onekei bolechhen.. songeeta dir to namer banan e vul chhilo... kintu keu altopka UNFAIR boleni.. eta bodher byapar.. konjaygay ki shobdo byabohar korte hoy.. tumi to kobi ebong tomar lekhao bes sharp.. eta nie tomay notun kore ki ba bolar achhe? r ami ekhate kori ba paer opor pa tule 10ta lok rekhe korai jai kori ta kokhonoi unfair er prokrishto jukti hote pare na... onyanya kobira jara amake lekha den ebong khub gorber songe boli besir vagkei ami samnasamni chinina.. tara vabbe ki?

astanirjan

8/16/2012 02:54:35 pm

deedar vai khub bhalo korechhis...ebar mal ta amake die de...tui prajapati urie ja...no prob....ami taral ti peley khusi.......

khub agochalo jata ultaplata...hoye achhi...vap utchhe majhe majhe dekhte pai....nijer kabita ta bar duek porar por ..er bhal laglo na.....dhus

se rakam karur kabitay bhal laglo na....mathay ki kichhu bhulbhal cell gojalo naki?...are ki agrohe foisal avi r kabita ta porte gye...eto bichhiri laglo....ami sunechhi uni asadharan lekhen...kintu amar durvagyo aj abdi onar ektao kabitao amar bhalo lage ni..mane jekhane ..jemon vabe...ja alpo kichhu peyechhi er ki...

asople kothayo kichhu ekta bhul ami i korchhi....korey jachhi..er aschorjyo korte bhalo o lagchhe....

bhaskar tui ekar hate ei kaj taj gulo koris ...kore ja...eta hoityo tor bhalobasar kichhu...kintu tor kabita din din bes nichhe namchhe..sedin toke bola hoi ni....adday ..aj bollam...dear....kabita lekh na kichhu...mairy lafie uthhe bauriyay express thamie di...ha ha

bhalo thakis....kabitay thakis...duendey te thakis....

Bhaskarjyoti Das

8/16/2012 11:53:16 pm

okhane tomar kharap laga boltei parte jodi nai bola jay samna samni tahole samna samni adda marte bose luv ki? printed lekha porlei chole..

jay hok seta to apekkhik tai na? protyeker ekta nijosso kabya dorshon thake, ki likhi kyano likhi seta protyeker alada.. r tomar amar lekhar dorshon sompurno alada... foloto swavabik j tomar amar lekha valo lagbe na... age lagto karon ager tulonay ekhon tomar dorshon sompurno onyadike.. etate osasthyer lokkhon kichhu nei.. thiu e achhe.. tomar sedin pora lekhar somosto kobitar modhye amake matro ekta line chuyechhilo.. bakigulo valo lageni.. bolini karon amader dorshonta alada..
kintu kotha holo egulo to byaktigoto alochona tomar amar... ekhane public station a na bole amake sms ba facebook msg ba fon koreo bolte parte...
jodi ekhane amar ekta kobita thakto tao na hoy hoto.. setao to nei.. ei osonlogno prosongo kyano elo bujhlam na...

amar tomar ei lekhatao ekdom valo lage ni kintu sompadok hisabe amar valo nalagatai ses kotha ki? tai ami chhepechhi.. sommaner songe chhepechhi..

ami ekhate kori kajta, valobasa theke kori, tar songe amar lekhar kono somporko achhe ki? janina..

আশিস সরকার, রায়গঞ্জ,উত্তরদিনাজপুর

8/16/2012 03:16:47 pm

ভাল লাগল,এর বেশি আর বলার নেই।

পার্থ

8/16/2012 04:44:13 pm

valolaglo,notun kore kichu bolar nei..astanirjan dar lekha amr besh lage...Bhaskarjyoti da well done :)

Bhaskarjyoti Das

8/16/2012 11:55:18 pm

notun kobita gulo nie notun kore kichhu bolar nei kano PARTHO?
ekhane to kobita gulo nie bolbe.. amar karikuri nie noy...

ekta purono kobitai kotobar notun notun kotha jagie die jay.. r ekhane to notun kobita... ekbaro ki tader nie notun kichhu bolar nei?

astanirjan

8/18/2012 03:35:28 pm

hummm bhujlam...seta thik i bolechhis bodh hoi..tabe ami khub ekta saujonyobodh er dhar dhari na.....amar mone hoyechhe toke bola jai..jekhanei hok..seta printed ba printed na hole ki ba ase jai.......ei je tui bolli amar ei kabitata tor ektuo bhalo lage ni....darun....eta printed ba na printed amar kichhu jai ase na bhaskor....kabita ta lekha..etai bisoy...kake khusi korlo kake chulo...esab nie kichhuta mon kharap mon bhalo jarie thake..er kichhu na...

asole kabita tai likhte habe....eitukui....astanirjan

Bhaskarjyoti Das

8/18/2012 07:57:58 pm

soujonyabodher proshnoy nei...

kintu prasongikota ekta byapar...

tumi amar lekha valo bolleo seta oprasongik e theke jeto ebong tokhono ami eki kotha boltam...

sudhumudhu dompadok bole na likheo kyano amar kobitar comment parar pleasure vog korbo ami? kono prosonge astei pare seta alada..

astanirjan

8/18/2012 03:44:42 pm

er ekta kathya boli..tui kabitar darshan er kathya bolechhis..alada alada....kintu sotty serakam kichhu hoi ki?..alada alada....jekono ekta bangla kabita jadi bhalo lage..ami ki dekhte jabo seta natun ...abohoman....ei sab kina?..na kabitatai dekhbo...?...kabitar prati ei je biswas era ekta kabitar opor kaj...kabita noi kintu ...kabita kono daeshan er dhar dhare na....kono creativity i na...se khub ekta ochena jaiga theke lafie chole ase er mone hoi khub pasei chilo eto din bhujte pari ni..eta darshan na..eta anubhab....darshan ekta path ..se ekta dike lead kore seta kabitakeo hatya kore....

amat ei je kabita ta toke ekdam choi ni....eta amat falt...je bhabei likhhi na keno....ekta bhalo kichhu likhle natun fatun kichhu jai ase na..kabitata bhalo lege jai..darshan bahu dure darie thake....se muskil e pore jai....

Bhaskarjyoti Das

8/18/2012 07:55:36 pm

amar eta mone hoy na...

ei j tumi bolle darshan dure darie thake etao kobitar proti tomar byaktigoto upolobdhi.. ebong sei upolobdhi k tumi j nirnayok hisabe byabohar korchho seta dorshon hoye achchhe...

eta thik marx ba kant er darshan noy... eta ekrom drishtyvongi nijer proti.. ami ki likhbo kyano likhbo kivabe likho, ba ki likhbona kyano likhbona, kivabe likhbona... ba chaibo ba chaibo na... seta nishchoy protyeker alada alada farak ta kom besi ei ja

onuvob ses kotha jeneo ebong meneo eta amar mone hoy

Swarnadeep Banik

8/20/2012 12:33:59 am

Sorry,bhaskarjyotibabu. I'm very very sorry. Ami bujhte parini je unfair sobdo-ta apnake koshto debe,e jonno ageo ami rajdipda-r kach theke onek boka kheyechi, vobisshyot-e ami nijer ojante erokom kotha bole felleo onek boka khabo,i know that, kintu ami bujhte parina shobdo-ta jake bollam se mon-e koshto pelo na anondo. e byapar bujhte ami parina. jani na, kintu keu tate koshto pele ami-o koshto paai. ami janina amar kobita bhalo na kharap,amar khub kharap laglo je apni koshto peyechen.Apni nije banan-ta thik kore diechen, tar jonno dhonnobaad diechi,ami seta bolechilam na janar jonno. ami toh pore ta withdraw koreo niyechi. tobuo apnar jodi akhon-o kharap lege thake,ami abar khoma cheye nichchi.

Asol-e nijer kobitay banan bhul ba punctuation mark na porle ami dukkho paai,thik bhaskar chakrobarty-r moto (Tai bole ami je bhaskarbabu-r moto kobita likhte paari,amon kotha ami akebare bolboi na),sei dukkho-ta jahir korechilam apnake aebong mondakranta sen-keo,karon brishtidin-e amar lekhay thikthak jotichinno poreni. sei dukkher kotha ami chithi marfot mondakranta maa'm-ke janiyechilam. hoyto tini-o apnar moto amake kharap bhebhechen. amar kobita keu chapuk ba na chapuk tate amar dukkho nei,kintu jader-ke pathalam,tara dukkho ba koshto pele ami-o mone mone koshto paai.Eta amar swikarokti chilo,abar jodi ami apnake koshto diye thaki,tahole abar apologize korchi.

Kabir Roy Bachar

8/21/2012 03:08:59 pm

@Bhaskar Da, Kamon A6o,,,, Khub Khub Valo Laglo Ebarer Magazine ta, nice, 3week maa hospital a vorti 6ilo, saturday te bari ese6e, ami ei sunday te jabo tomar okhane,

Swarnadeep Banik

8/24/2012 12:51:53 am

Banglay likhle computer-e lal lal dheu khelano line birokti-te phale tai ebar theke english-e likhbo sochetonbhabhe,maybe. I have just read many criticisms on your first issue. In one word, wonderfully fabulous. I wish if Avishek Mookherjee lambast my poetry in this site, I'll be very happy. But that will be constructive. On that site, mr.shuvro(Shuvroneel Sagar,maybe) cited Rilke's statement. I was shocked to see that Rilke,whom i adored in the translations (Or,Utsaron {I didn't find any better meaning of that Bengali word}) of Buddhadev Basu, had this sense of mind. However,thank you Bhaskarjyotibabu to tell me to see iduende's first chapter.

Barin Ghosal

8/24/2012 03:57:23 pm

Khub bhalo legeche Astonirjan, Shubhronil ar Swarnodeep-er kobita. Barnona hin, bishoyhin, otirekhin, noirbyoktik kobita ekhan bhalo lage.
Swarnodeep, tomar kobitay ki bhul ache ta to janar agei amar balo legeche. Oi samanyo bhul-e ki jai ase bhai ? Kobitar to kono mane hoyna, shabder-o kono mane nei. Shudhu dhwonir ranan chunye jai kobita hoye. Great. Sanjay, atobar "mato" likhle kobita nasto hoye jai bhai.

Swarnadeep Banik

9/6/2012 12:51:47 am

Thank You,sir.You can say it as a childish act and I'm now got over it.Let it go.Again,thank you,sir.

Barin Ghosal

8/24/2012 04:02:51 pm

Black e yellow bhalo khole, white na, tao ato choto letters. Barong reverse better hoy. White lettering rakhte hole bigger koro Bhaskar. Ar, kalor opor laal to ati baje lage. Dhyan dao bhai. Tomar writing pagegulo kono painter ke dekhiy e nio.

Rahul

9/18/2012 04:44:46 am

Foysol Ovi anoboddoy..............darun laaglo lekhata.

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